Fleeting Time [Freeverse]

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Fleeting Time [Freeverse]

Post by Hucota7 on Mon Feb 22, 2010 4:02 pm

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How quickly time can slip away
Elude our grasp
Refuse to stay.
All the moments lost to time
Drift away
Without a thought.
After they have come and gone,
We wish them back
But it’s too late.
Maybe this is meant to be,
Maybe it is fate.
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poem for english class. :3
~huco

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Re: Fleeting Time [Freeverse]

Post by Moshda on Mon Feb 22, 2010 4:06 pm

O.O wow that's sooooo good! I luuuurve it <3 I like the little rhyming thing you've got going on at the beginning and the end. It really helps tie everything together.

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Re: Fleeting Time [Freeverse]

Post by Kelly on Mon Feb 22, 2010 7:37 pm

I love it! It made me cry! lol

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Re: Fleeting Time [Freeverse]

Post by Delilah Roze on Thu Sep 02, 2010 1:29 pm

Ooooh, me likey! LOL, this is really good! I like how it sort of has a circular motion to it. It starts at the beginning, and then it ends at the ending, if you know what I mean. Like it's the perfect length, and you began and ended it perfectly.

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